Can some of you lovely people please tell me your views on my new ‘About me’ bit. It would only let me write up to 1200 characters and since I had written a lot more than that at first, I had to then keep cutting bits out until I was left with this. It then automatically took out all the gaps and paragraphs and everything and squashed them all together!
Please be as critical as you can. To be honest I think it sounds a bit silly myself but I thought maybe it’s because I had to read it about fifty times to shorten it and stuff. The thing is on my website I have an about me section as well and so I wanted this one to be completely different to that and also to give a feel of what this blog was about. Is it working or is it rubbish? That is the question.
Some people use retail-therapy to cheer themselves up when they are down. I use it to get myself back down to the reality of life when I’m too happy. Once a month I turn from a smiley, easygoing lady into a tense, irritable, creature who prowls around looking for things to get annoyed by. At the peak of this time I will go up to my husband, Kamyar and say, ‘I’m not having a go at you but…’ or ‘I don’t want you to think I’m having a go at you again but…’ After this lecture I will storm off and for the next five minutes I will try to convince myself that I was very right to tell him how mad it makes me when he for example leaves the bedroom door open or shot, depending on whichever one he has done that day. Shortly after that I will run back to him (who is usually still in the same stunned state) crying and saying, ‘I’m so sorry.’ When I do something I put a lot of time into it and try to both do it well and enjoy it at the same time, be it painting a portrait of Queen Elizabeth, cleaning the loo or writing a note to put on a neighbour’s car to say ‘please shut off your ******* alarm’ You can take a look at my artwork and read more about me on www.shirinadl.co.uk
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It's intresting but as you said it yourself, it just shows one-tenth of you, say three days a month(?) In fact it's good for:
"find out less about me." Not for:
"find out more about me." Isn't it?
i'm glad someone else is that way (i think shahin would agree with this), but i think gazankhan said it best. you have a preternatural gift for taking the ordinary and making it extraordinary and most importantly you can communicate it beautifully through a variety of mediums. that's what people should know about you!
amanda
I liked the bedroom door bit a lot...
I like the 'note to the neighbour'.
Looks good :)
Thanks a lot for all your comments everyone. I guess it’s back to the drawing board (or in this case Word) for me. The thing is I was trying to be honest and so I thought what’s the worst thing about me? Going a bit loopy every month. So I thought I put that in. but maybe I stretched it out a bit too much. I’ll be back with a newer better version soon.
This would work wonderfully as a posting--and it leaves me wanting to know more.
If you want paragraphs, try adding the html for paragraph, which is the greater-than sign, the letter p, and the less-than sign. Do not put spaces between the three characters.
The comment poster won't let me illustrate with the actual characters because it then tries to read them as html.
Place the three characters between your paragraphs instead of a blank line.
I agree with gazankhan. It is very well written and etertaining, but only introduces the bit of you that appears once a month. Since I know you very well I don't feel that it's a fair representation of you. I would have loved it if it was only a small part of your introduction. xxx
I don't know how much that says about the "real" you but I like it!
Thank you so much for that Graceonline. It worked :-)
Yes Negar and Shadgoli, it’s probably not the real me. I wish it would give me more space to write. But in a way maybe it’s better that it doesn’t because then there would be no end to this ;-)
no way! you can't be doing the made up story thing too. i thought that was MY thing. too bad you're older than me otherwise i'd say you stole the idea from me. now i hope it's just the two of us. it would be quite a disappointment if it turned out that everyone does it.
You too?! I can’t believe it. I have a confession to make; sometimes my stories are extremely cheesy. Are yours?
like soap operas?! hmmm...yeah, i think you could say that sometimes mine are cheesy too. it depends on the influx of cheesy stuff i've read or watched!
Shirin joon, we can tell who you are by your writings :-) The "about me" helps visualize you more "easily" and I love it. You march to "your own drum" and I admire it in a person. Last but not least; khosh beh-haaleh Kami to have you as his friend, wife, lover, companion & confident. Love you - Khaleh Tima
thanks Tima-joon :-)
love you too
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